Teh Wozzinator

i loved it!! the title is what got me here.... but, as those before me, i'm confused at what's happening. how i interpreted it was just a kid on the ...

my edits are in bold my heart aches, as i gaze up into your beautiful eyes. this line was good... my heart skips a beat my face, flushed of all ...

I guess I didn't really get it...I agree with Suzanne. And your rhythm needs work too.... It's rough and some of the lines are too short (all the single-word lines). ...

omigosh!! i can't believe this came out without me knowing it!! lol. my edits in bold, as usual :arrow: Author's Note Hi, This might not turn out to be your ...

my edits will be in bold He could almost taste the mouse, it was so close. Raul drew in, step by step. This time he must not miss. The mouse ...

my edits are in bold NOTE: This is something I wrote as a writing prompt. It sort of like an "alternate reality." This didn't actually happen in my book, Followers ...

i agree with Saint (Razorblade), it's a bit rushed...it's not exactly my style of writing with the "colonial" sort of thing, but it wasn't bad. the first paragraph needs more ...

i don't see anything to edit grammar-wise...i liked your first paragraph, how you described it--acting as you are the author, not someone in the story writing it, but not to ...

ok, that was kind of creepy and totally different...nothing new to say here, either. i think that it's interesting of all your totally different ratings for everything, but i do ...

this is crazy, how the time period and stories keep changing...i'm kind of surprised that you won't ever repeat any characters (except for the mutts, i assume...), but from these ...

wow, this seems totally different from the last two, but i really liked it! just keeps adding more and more mystery, yet clearing just a few things up. it's like ...

well, it seems as though Saint and Penguin have taken care of edits for me, but i must say...i like the style that you're writing with, and your idea of ...

i thought that for such a short piece, you did really well. no grammar to edit...your character development (i agree) is great, and already i'm starting to know the characters. ...

edits in bold I couldn't decide if this belonged in lyrical or narrative poetry, so I put it here. Happy Holidays everyone! Silence Hangs in the Air Still as a ...

my edits will be in bold... Hey this is my first thing to ever post so keep that in mind when you read this! I need the criticism, so please ...